Interlude 1

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“We don’t know how long he had been there.  Suspended in the air above the Atlantic Ocean.  On May twentieth, 1982, an ocean liner was crossing from Plymouth to Boston when a passenger spotted him.  He was naked, his arms to his sides, his long hair blowing in the wind as he stood in the sky, nearly a hundred feet above the gently cresting waves.  His skin and hair can only be described as a burnished gold.  With neither body hair nor clothes to cover him, it is said, he seemed almost artificial.

“After a discussion including passenger and crew, the liner detoured to get closer.  It was a sunny day, and passengers crowded to the railings to get a better look.  As if sharing their curiosity, the figure drew closer as well.  His expression was unchanging, but witnesses at the scene reported that he appeared deeply sad.

“‘I thought he was going to crack his facade and cry any moment’, said Grace Lands, ‘But when I reached out and touched his fingertips, I was the one who burst into tears.’

“‘That boat trip was a final journey for me.  I had cancer, and I wasn’t brave enough to face it.  Can’t believe I’m admitting this in front of a camera, but I was going back to Boston, where I was born, to end things myself.  After I met him, I changed my mind.  Didn’t matter anyways.  I went to a doctor, and he said there was no sign I ever had the disease.’

“‘My brother, Andrew Hawke, was the last passenger to make any sort of contact with him, I remember.  He climbed up onto the railing, and, almost falling off, he clasped the hand of the golden man.  The rest of us had to grab onto him to keep him from falling.  Whatever happened left him with a quiet awe.  When the man with the golden skin flew away, my brother stayed silent.  The rest of the way to Boston, my brother didn’t say a word.  When we docked, and the spell finally broke, my brother babbled his excitement to reporters like a child.’

“The golden man would reappear several more times in the coming months and years.  At some point, he donned clothing.  At first, a sheet worn over one shoulder and pinned at either side of the waist, then more conventional clothes.  In 1999, he donned the white bodysuit he still wears today.  For more than a decade, we have wondered, where did our golden man get these things?  Who was he in contact with?

“Periodically at first, then with an increasing frequency, the golden man started to intervene in times of crisis.  For events as small as a car accident, as great as natural disasters, he has arrived and used his abilities to save us.  A flash of light to freeze water reinforcing a levee stressed by a hurricane.  A terrorist act averted.  A serial murderer caught.  A volcano quelled.  Miracles, it was said.

“His pace increased, perhaps because he was still learning what he could do, perhaps because he was getting a greater sense of where he was needed.  By the middle of the 1990s, he was traveling from crisis to crisis, flying faster than the speed of sound.  In fifteen years, he has not rested.

“He has been known to speak just once in thirty years.  After extinguishing widespread fire in Alexandrovsk, he paused to survey the scene and be sure no blazes remained.  A reporter spoke to him, and asked, ‘Kto vy?’ – what are you?

“Shocking the world, caught on camera in a scene replayed innumerable times, he answered in a voice that sounded as though it might never have uttered a sound before.  Barely audible, he told her, ‘Scion’.

“It became the name we used for him.  Ironic, because we took a word that meant descendant, and used it to name the first of many superpowered individuals – parahumans – to appear across Earth.

“Just five years after Scion’s first appearance, the superheroes emerged from the cover of rumor and secrecy to show themselves to the public.  Though the villains followed soon after, it was the heroes who shattered any illusions of the parahumans being divine figures.  In 1989, attempting to quell a riot over a basketball game in Michigan, the superhero known to the public as Vikare stepped in, only to be clubbed over the head.  He died not long after of a brain embolism.  Later, he would be revealed to be Andrew Hawke.

“The golden age of the parahumans was thus short lived.  They were not the deific figures they had appeared to be.  Parahumans were, after all, people with powers, and people are flawed at their core.  Government agencies took a firmer hand, and state-”

The television flicked off, and the screen went black, cutting the documentary off mid sentence.  Danny Hebert sighed and sat down on the bed, only to stand just a moment later and resume pacing.

It was three fifteen in the morning, and his daughter Taylor was not in her bedroom.

Danny ran his hands through his hair, which was thinned enough at the top to be closer to baldness than not.  He liked to be the first to arrive at work, watching everyone arrive, having them know he was there for them.  So he usually went to bed early; he’d turn in at ten in the evening, give or take depending on what was on TV.  Only tonight, a little past midnight, he’d been disturbed from restless sleep when he had felt rather than heard the shutting of the back door of the house, just below his bedroom.  He had checked on his daughter, and he’d found her room empty.

So he had waited for his daughter to return for three hours.

Countless times, he had glanced out the window, hoping to see Taylor coming in.

For the twentieth time, he felt the urge to ask his wife for help, for advice, for support.  But her side of the bed was empty and it had been for some time.  Daily, it seemed, he was struck by the urge to call her cell phone.  He knew it was stupid – she wouldn’t pick up – and if he dwelt on that for too long, he became angry at her, which just made him feel worse.

He wondered, even as he knew the answer, why he hadn’t gotten Taylor a cell phone.  Danny didn’t know what his daughter was doing, what would drive her to go out at night.  She wasn’t the type.  He could tell himself that most fathers felt that way about their daughters, but at the same time, he knew.  Taylor wasn’t social.  She didn’t go to parties, she wouldn’t drink, she wasn’t even that interested in champagne when they celebrated the New Year together.

Two ominous possibilities kept nagging at him, both too believable.  The first was that Taylor had gone out for fresh air, or even for a run.  She wasn’t happy, especially at school, he knew, and exercise was her way of working through it.  He could see her doing it on a Sunday night, with a fresh week at school looming.  He liked that her running made her feel better about herself, that she seemed to be doing it in a reasonable, healthy way. He just hated that she had to do it here, in this neighborhood.  Because here, a skinny girl in her mid-teens was an easy target for attack.  A mugging or worse – he couldn’t even articulate the worst of the possibilities in his own thoughts without feeling physically sick.  If she had gone out at eleven in the evening for a run and hadn’t come back by three in the morning, then it meant something had happened.

He glanced out the window again, at that corner of the house where the pool of illumination beneath the streetlight would let him see her approaching.  Nothing.

The second possibility wasn’t much better.  He knew Taylor was being bullied.  Danny had found that out in January, when his little girl had been pulled out of school and taken to the hospital.  Not the emergency room, but the psychiatric ward.  She wouldn’t say by whom, but under the influence of the drugs they had given her to calm down, she had admitted she was being victimized by bullies, using the plural to give him a clue that it was a they and not a he or a she.  She hadn’t mentioned it – the incident or the bullying – since.  If he pushed, she only tensed up and grew more withdrawn.  He had resigned himself to letting her reveal the details in her own time, but months had passed without any hints or clues being offered.

There was precious little Danny could do on the subject, either.  He had threatened to sue the school after his daughter had been taken to the hospital, and the school board had responded by settling, paying her hospital bills and promising they would look out for her to prevent such events from occurring in the future. It was a feeble promise made by a chronically overworked staff and it didn’t do a thing to ease his worries.  His efforts to have her change schools had been stubbornly countered with rules and regulations about the maximum travel times a student was allowed to have between home and a given school.  The only other school within a reasonable distance of Taylor’s place of residence was Arcadia High, and it was already desperately overcrowded with more than two hundred students on a list requesting admittance.

With all that in mind, when his daughter disappeared until the middle of the night, he couldn’t shake the idea that the bullies might have lured her out with blackmail, threats or empty promises.  He only knew about the one incident, the one that had landed her in the hospital, but it had been grotesque.  It had been implied, but never elaborated on, that more had been going on.  He could imagine these boys or girls that were tormenting his daughter, egging one another on as they came up with more creative ways to humiliate or harm her.  Taylor hadn’t said as much aloud, but whatever had been going on had been mean, persistent and threatening enough that Emma, Taylor’s closest friend for years, had stopped spending time with her.  It galled him.

Impotent.  Danny was helpless where it counted.  There was no action he could take – his one call to the police at two in the morning had only earned him a tired explanation that the police couldn’t act or look for her without something more to go on.  If his daughter was still gone after twelve hours, he’d been told, he should call them again.  All he could do was wait and pray with his heart in his throat that the phone wouldn’t ring, a police officer or nurse on the other end ready to tell him what had happened to his daughter.

The slightest of vibrations in the house marked the escape of the warm air in the house to the cold outdoors, and there was a muffled whoosh as the kitchen door shut again.  Danny Hebert felt a thrill of relief coupled with abject fear.  If he went downstairs to find his daughter, would he find her hurting or hurt?  Or would his presence make things worse, her own father seeing her at her most vulnerable after humiliation at the hands of bullies?  She had told him, in every way except articulating it aloud, that she didn’t want that.  She had pleaded with him, with body language and averted eye contact, unfinished sentences and things left unsaid, not to ask, not to push, not to see, when it came to the bullying.  He couldn’t say why, exactly.  Home was an escape from that, he’d suspected, and if he recognized the bullying, made it a reality here, maybe she wouldn’t have that relief from it.  Perhaps it was shame, that his daughter didn’t want him to see her like that, didn’t want to be that weak in front of him.  He really hoped that wasn’t the case.

So he ran his fingers through his hair once more and sat down on the corner of the bed, elbows on his knees, hands on his head, and stared at his closed bedroom door.  His ears were peeled for the slightest clue.  The house was old, and it hadn’t been a high quality building when it had been new, so the walls were thin and the structure prone to making noise at every opportunity.  There was the faintest sound of a door closing downstairs.  The bathroom?  It wouldn’t be the basement door, with no reason for her to go down there, and he couldn’t imagine it was a closet, because after two or three minutes, the same door opened and closed again.

After something banged on the kitchen counter, there was little but the occasional groan of floorboards.  Five or ten minutes after she had come in, there was the rhythmic creak of the stairs as she ascended.  Danny thought about clearing his throat to let her know he was awake and available should she knock on his door, but decided against it.  He was being cowardly, he thought, as if his clearing of his throat would give reality to his fears.

Her door shut carefully, almost inaudibly, with the slightest tap of door on doorframe.  Danny stood, abruptly, opening his door, ready to cross the hall and knock on her door.  To verify that his daughter was okay.

He was stopped by the smell of jam and toast.  She had made a late night snack.  It filled him with relief.  He couldn’t imagine his daughter, after being mugged, tormented or humiliated, coming home to have toast with jam as a snack.  Taylor was okay, or at least, okay enough to be left alone.

He let out a shuddering sigh of relief and retreated to his room to sit on the bed.

Relief became anger.  He was angry at Taylor, for making him worry, and then not even going out of her way to let him know she was okay.  He felt a smouldering resentment towards the city, for having neighborhoods and people he couldn’t trust his daughter to.  He hated the bullies that preyed on his daughter.  Underlying it all was frustration with himself.  Danny Hebert was the one person he could control in all of this, and Danny Hebert had failed to do anything that mattered.  He hadn’t gotten answers, hadn’t stopped the bullies, hadn’t protected his daughter.  Worst of all was the idea that this might have happened before, with him simply sleeping through it rather than laying awake.

He stopped himself from walking into his daughter’s room, from shouting at her and demanding answers, even if it was what he wanted, more than anything.  Where had she been, what had she been doing?  Was she hurt?  Who were these people that were tormenting her?  He knew that by confronting her and getting angry at her, he would do more harm than good, would threaten to sever any bond of trust they had forged between them.

Danny’s father had been a powerful, heavyset man, and Danny hadn’t gotten any of those genes.  Danny had been a nerd when the term was still young in popular culture, stick thin, awkward, short sighted, glasses, bad fashion sense.  What he had inherited was his father’s famous temper.  It was quick to rise and startling in its intensity.  Unlike his father, Danny had only ever hit someone in anger twice, both times when he was much younger.  That said, just like his father, he could and would go off on tirades that would leave people shaking.  Danny had long viewed the moment he’d started to see himself as a man, an adult, to be the point in time where he had sworn to himself that he wouldn’t ever lose his temper with his family.  He wouldn’t pass that on to his child the way his father had to him.

He had never broken that oath with Taylor, and knowing that was what kept him contained in his room, pacing back and forth, red in the face and wanting to punch something.  While he’d never gotten angry at her, never screamed at her, he knew Taylor had seen him angry.  Once, he had been at work, talking to a mayor’s aide.  The man had told Danny that the revival projects for the Docks were being cancelled and that, contrary to promises, there were to be layoffs rather than new jobs for the already beleaguered Dockworkers.  Taylor had been spending the morning in his office on the promise that they would go out for the afternoon, and had been in a position to see him fly off the handle in the worst way with the man.  Four years ago, he had lost his temper with Annette for the first time, breaking his oath to himself.  That had been the last time he had seen her.  Taylor hadn’t been there to see him shouting at her mother, but he was fairly certain she’d heard some of it.  It shamed him.

The third and last time that he had lost his temper where Taylor had been in a position to know had been when she had been hospitalized following the incident in January.  He’d screamed at the school’s principal, who had deserved it, and at Taylor’s then-Biology teacher, who probably hadn’t.  It had been bad enough that a nurse had threatened to call for a police officer, and Danny, barely mollified, had stomped from the hallway to the hospital room to find his daughter more or less conscious and wide eyed in reaction.  Danny harbored a deep fear that the reason Taylor hadn’t offered any details on the bullying was out of fear he would, in blind rage, do something about it.  It made him feel sick, the notion that he might have contributed something to his daughter’s self imposed isolation in how she was dealing with her problems.

It took Danny a long time to calm down, helped by telling himself over and over that Taylor was okay, that she was home, that she was safe.  It was something of a blessing that, as the anger faded, he felt drained.  He climbed into the left side of the bed, leaving the right side empty out of a habit he’d yet to break, and pulled the covers up around himself.

He would talk to Taylor in the morning.  Get an answer of some sort.

He dreamed of the ocean.

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59 thoughts on “Interlude 1

  1. What, that’s it??

    Seriously, excellent job so far. I would have a few quibbles, but overall great job, keep writing.

  2. Woo, first commenter.

    Thanks for the feedback – there’s definitely more to come. Wouldn’t mind feedback on the ‘quibbles’ – it’s stuff I can improve on in the future.

    • I came back to remind myself of where the comments actually started to arrive. It makes me think how much things have progressed bet you weren’t expecting the onslaught of comments that came your way where you? Were you American Wildbow, it would’ve been a a nice ID4 present and I never can write that without thinking of a D@D mag’es hit die.

      To be serious. You are brilliant and it is sometimes nice to visit where things start

  3. Wow. Nice chapter. Really. It’s very nice to read superheroic fiction with full sections that aren’t about superheroics, but actually are anyway — if you know what I mean. Great job.


  4. Good god, that was some awesome characterization. I think I came close to feeling what your dad character felt and empathized with him. It makes me hungry to know more. Truly execelelnt job.

  5. Hopefully Taylor will not be to upset when her dad asks what she was doing. But it is a parents job to worry about there kids.

  6. I just discovered this a few days ago, and I really like what I’ve read. It’s a cool story with a fascinating mythology forming. I’ll keep picking away at it until I catch up. I’m excited to see where you go with this.

  7. Something’s been bothering me for a while. Why did they assume that his answer was ‘Scion,’ a non-Russian word. If he understood the question, why would he be assumed to correctly answer in another language?

    Heck, maybe he was claiming to be Psionic(Psion). Or a Dan Brown style fictional descendant of Christ(Sion). With hesitation and pauses, it might have been one or multiple words…

    Perhaps a better question is, IS that what the world assumes, or is that not the prevailing theory throughout the world? I can imagine the Russians having a different view.

    Probably shouldn’t be thinking about this near 7 am on a work day.

  8. In russian they usually don’t ask “Chto vy?” but “Kto vy?” It means “Who are you?” but is used by russian speakers in situations when english would say “What are you?”. I can’t imagine a russian reporter saying “Chto vy?”

    • I can see both fitting in this case. Scion is apparently more than a mere human, more even than a mere parahuman. He’s almost a god.

  9. Never mind if this comes up later, but it’s kind of bothering me that there’s no mention of him threatening to/going to the police about the big bullying incident, whether re: other students or the school for failing duty of care, or even just talking to a lawyer about it? I mean I realise it would likely have been a bust in the long term and he may have been turned off it pretty quick, but considering it was serious enough for Taylor to be hospitalised it seems odd that it doesn’t seem to have occurred to him?

    • I believe he didn’t have an exact reason to go to the police. He went off on them at the hospital to such an extent they were calling the police on him.

      Besides that incident I don’t think he had proof of the level of bullying mandating reporting to the police

  10. Ah, just the chapter I was wanting. It feels extremely strange how the next chapter always seems to answer the exact question I was thinking most about last chapter. This is probably a sign that I should stop commenting about these things. 🙂

  11. So, when you are editing, feel free to just chop everything before this post. Some how, and I am not sure how, I started reading here. When I shared this with my friends, they started reading at the beginning. I felt that the beginning was awesome, but my friends said it was pretty weak. Re-reading it, pretty much the only thing I missed not having read ‘first person’ was her first interaction with Armsmaster. Everything else was so well referenced that it was just an overall better reading experience starting here.

  12. Throughout the story, Taylor’s relationship with her dad is depicted as strongly affectionate but twisted by their shared tragedy. Yet neither of them trusts the other enough to discuss some really important issues honestly. I can’t decide whether I think this is a nice touch of realism or twisted in its own way. Sad how this would not have struck me as odd until recently, how I would’ve thought it was fairly common, how I would have accepted their affection as evidence that everything was basically okay, how I used to think, of course you must wear a mask even when dealing with those closest to you. Bullshit! Don’t settle for that!

  13. The last two lines are perfectly necessary, I think. It typifies his character, and thus, his parenting, but also reveals how his decision is eating away at him. “Boiling close to the surface” comes to mind. And as a closer, it sums his chapter up pretty well.

  14. Please delete my “fix spoiler” post on the earlier comment; I mis-read the poster’s speculation about Taylor’s grandfather.

    Just a niggle for the future publication rewrite: Scion’s Mini-bio timeline presented here to intro him is kinda bumpy. Just needs small tweaks.

    He was first spotted 1982;
    Wears more and more clothes until full costume by 1999;
    “for more than a decade, we have wondered”; (only since 2002?)
    “By the middle … 1990s, he was traveling”; (After Hawke outted? Wearing?)
    “In fifteen years, he has not rested”; (only since 1997?)
    “known to speak just once in thirty years”; (is when established?)
    “Just five years after … appearance, the superheroes emerged”; (so 1987?)
    In 1989, … {Andrew Hawke outted} (was S still in a sheet here?)

    This is being recounted in a newsreel in Taylor’s present time, presumably that 30 years later, so … 2012. If true, the parentheticals need revision.

    Sorry I’m such a nitpick! {ergh … bad bug reference 😉 }

    As long as I’m being an overwrought copy-editor:
    Danny wakes after midnight to closing door; later ponders whether Taylor went running at 11PM.

  15. Liking the story so far… just noticed a typo “sleeping through it rather than laying awake” should be “lying”.

  16. Your work is quickly becoming an obsession for me. I have long loved the super-hero genre but this one is EXCEPTIONAL. I saw your post on reddit a year ago about you finishing your novel and not knowing what to do with it. The ONLY thing that could do this series any sort of Justice would be a television show. It would have to be HBO or AMC but any other genre (even traditional publishing) just doesn’t feel like it would work. I am absolutely enthralled.

    • With a work of fiction this good, I honestly don’t think HBO can be trusted. Look at what they did to A Song of Ice and Fire.

  17. Wow, this is the most realistic look at parenting that I’ve ever seen in fiction. I may not be a parent myself, but I definitely empathize with her father here. I can easily imagine myself in his position, reacting the same way he does.

    It’s not necessarily “good parenting” but it’s not unrealistic like so many other fictional parents are. And you can easily see how much he loves his daughter, how much his wife’s departure bothers him, and how his anger issues plague him. Some great characterization there.

    • It’s one of the more realistic portrayals of family relationships in general, I think, that I’ve ever read, especially in a more action/adventure genre. Characterization and character interaction throughout the story is really, really good.

  18. Whoa, I went to Arcadia High School. I’m assuming you’re from SGV? Especially since you mentioned an Asian gang.

  19. Hello! I recently started reading Worm and I am really enjoying it so far! I know this chapter is old, but the person who introduced me mention that you might appreciate a correction?

    It’s about this quote: “A reporter spoke to him, and asked, ‘Kto vy?’ – what are you?”

    While a previous commenter was correct in saying that “Shto vy?” aka “What are you?” (with the respectful/formal plural “you”) is an unnatural phrase in Russian and that “Kto vy?” would probably be the go-to for this reporter, I wanted to mention that it caught my eye when I first read this that “Kto vy?” does directly translate to “Who are you?” and not “What are you?” so it was strange to see “What are you?” as the translation.

    An alternate might be “Shto ty?” which does mean “What are you?” but it uses the informal or non respectful “ty” for “you,” so the connotations are more along the lines of “What is this… this CREATURE that I thought was human?” and not respectful or something you would say to a being you feel awe and appreciation for.

    Er, sorry for that text dump about such a small bit! I just get excited when there is Russian in stories. I’m really excited to keep reading. 8)

  20. Hello, new reader here. I saw you get lots of great reviews so I decided to pick this up. I have an issue with this chapter, though. As a past victim of bullying, whose parents found out, his reaction seems a bit strange to me. There are differences (obviously) in Taylor and I’s experiences, one being as soon as it came to light, I told the school who was responsible and they all got suspended. Afterwards, to my surprise, they didn’t threaten to kill me anymore after that and I only received minor insults from unrelated (to the incident) parties. Still, my parents couldn’t bear to let me stay in that hell-hole of a school any longer and decided we would move. We didn’t move far, but just a city over was far enough–I never got bullied again after moving away. Anyways, my point is, if he was really was as concerned and worried as we’re meant to believe he is, then why has he not considered moving away from this nightmarish city. His job isn’t a great excuse to me, because my parents have shown me time and time again that where there’s a will there’s a way. I’m not saying they need to move haphazardly without any plans, but if my child was taken to the HOSPITAL I’d be getting her the hell out of that situation asap. Whether she opened up to me about it or not.

    • Ah,but You forget,the world has diverged significantly from our own,as having real superheroes and supervillains,and perhaps other things as wekk (I am only reading this now for the first time,so I duno much yet).Traveling to another city,assuming he has the monetary convenience to do that (he doesn’t seem that rich,and he could think that forcing his daughther to live in horrible circumstances ,such as on the street,would be worse.Also,his job sems to be city based and unemployment seems to be getting a worse problem.).Even barring that,it could be somehow forbidden or dangerous to travel between cities.Not only that,but the protagonist is obviously too shy for her own good,never revealing the bullies,and she prolly would object to transferring,thinking it would be the same.Also,yeah,where there is a will there is away,but humans are also fearful creatures,often if not forthemselves,for others.He might be wrong,he is not a perfect parent,and he may have been able to take a course to save his daughther.Which is why he hates himself:he wants to help her,yet he is helpless to do so due to his own fear ,yet he cannot shake the feeling he could have changed things had he reacted differently….not a bad parent,just not a very competent one.

  21. On my first read-through, I clicked on this link thinking it was the first part of the story, then went back to read the rest of chapter 1. It actually worked pretty well, (although some things would need to be modified). Something to keep in mind when editing the story.

  22. I feel for this man’s plight. I actually cried for him. Knowing that there’s something in you that you can barely control and feeling that you only have the ability to make things worse. I can connect with that on so many levels. Thank you for this story.

  23. “After I met him, I changed my mind. Didn’t matter anyways. I went to a doctor, and he said there was no sign I ever had the disease.’”
    This is just picking a nit that has always bothered me since it cropped up around eight to ten years ago. Even if some people claim that it was 20 or 30 years ago, “Anyways” is not a word and was not part of the slang in America in 1982. Seeing it here is ananchronistic, but otherwise not a big deal because I am loving the story.

    I know that anger that which has been passed down. I have reduced people to tears just by force of will, whereas it was done to me through will and violence. I am ashamed that I made anyone feel that afraid and do not do it any longer. Still, reading it here brought the shame back. It is good to never forget, lest I find myself angry and on fire before I have a chance to see things objectively. It sucks to be an alcoholic without ever touching a drop.

    This is my first read-through and I am as enthralled as I was when I was reading The Saga of Tuck. I also love Lillith Langtree (nom de plume) very much, but she makes amazing starts more often than full stories. I guess if I wrote like her, I’d not want to close off the world I had created, either.

    Your writing, wildbow, is making me glad I didn’t find Worm five years ago. I would have worn out my F5 key, hoping for the next installment each day. 8) I especially enjoy the depth of the characters and the ease with which I can visualize the pictures you paint with words.

    • Anyways seems to be a thing for Wildbow? When I noticed Taylor doing it I took it in stride, but we get it from a lot of others as well. It’s not extremely common, and it’s such a small thing, but it does skew the tone when straight-edge Armsmaster throws casual slang into things.

      If I ever considered writing fan fiction, one of the big appeals would be to have “sane” outsider characters commenting sotto voce how weird it is how everyone in Brockton Bay has that one verbal tic. &p

  24. So there’s quite a word going on about Worm these days, and I felt like I had to finally read some of it for myself. As of now I have finished the first arc.

    A very interesting start so far, and it’s definitely in contrast compared to a lot of superhero stories you see around these days.

    I’m not sure how much I like Taylor as a character yet, but I would be lying if I didn’t say her power set is cool. Insect-imitation is common, being able to have human-scale spider powers or the like, but I feel insect control is not at all seen as often. It certainly makes her seem more vulnerable in a way, since she doesn’t have all of Spider-Man’s benefits and ability to take punishment, but it also gives the story a more gritty and realistic feel.

    The few villains we’ve seen so far seem promising, as well as Armsmaster himself and her father. I particularly liked this interlude at the end because we’re back at 3rd person perspective, which I greatly prefer, and we get a ton of insight into his stress and worry for his daughter.

    Overall, you’ve got a great voice and sense of prose. I’m curious to see how the story develops from here and how things shift from the super-heroic norm.

    • So, how have you been enjoying this so far? I’m re-reading the story and often like hearing about recent first timers 🙂

      • It’s pretty cool. Well-developed characters, an unorthodox lead, serious themes handled well, and creative use of new and existing superpowers. All and all a great package so far.

  25. I’m on my fifth (sixth?) read through of Worm and God, my love of Danny Hebert is eternal and undying. He’s such a good man, what I would want from a father, something like I want to be, as a father. Trying his best.

    • This is me, coming back years later after finally convincing a friend to read. Cant stop. Its so much harder though on my emotions when you know what happens.

  26. One time, when I was about sixteen, I was woken up in the middle of the night by a scream like my little brother had managed to fall out of his second floor bedroom window. That sounds overly specific, but it’s actually not specific enough: I have a very good ear for locating sounds, at least when I’ve had several years to get used to the space around where I’m living, and this was a terrifyingly loud scream that came from specifically the space between the window of my brother’s bedroom and the ground beneath it. I was too scared to move. And I could hear my parents were not moving either. After some time, I went to sleep.

    That’s to say, I know what Danny is going through when he’s sitting in his empty house in the middle of the night listening for signs that his child is all right without any power to help her. I know it very well, except for the part where she’s a teenage girl, and it’s not hard to imagine the extra terror that would add.

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